214 pages in March. First up is page 123.

Page 123

ZANBUTU: THE UNIFIED AFRICAN GALACTIC CITY by AYO MAKINDE

The first few sentences in the prologue could use some extra commas. Or maybe they should have been broken up into smaller sentences.

The Lunatic by Lauren Wantz

The description:

Anglor is a Selenite, a man from the moon sent to Earth on a divine mission to make it a better world, but the catch is, it will be difficult to convince people of a better way because due to the fact that he will not give up his Selenite traditions, (including a suicide and re-brith every six motnhs,) he will be deemed insane, as “The Lunatic,” as he, through becoming a renowned artist makes a plea to the planet Earth to “kill history,” and start again without it.

That is just one sentence folks. There are also a few mistakes.

Survivor’s Fate: The Gifted Book One by AJ Thomas

There was a sentence in the description that I just couldn’t get past:

His journey will be questioned and he will have to ask himself if there is more to his story than revenge.

“His journey will be questioned”?

Reality Junction by Alexander Hawksville

The first sentence in the book:

Hector Macdonald drove his electric ecovan into Pod City.

I really hate first sentences like these. It’s literally: someone did something. So what?

The second sentence:

A steady drizzle fell from the sky as he undid his seat-belt, switched of the ignition, and got out, and.

And? And?

Page 140

The Augmented Man: (A Military Psychological Thriller) by Joseph Carrabis

The description has a lot of unattributed quotes all praising the book, which made it look a little shady. The book itself starts with 4 different epigraphs, and it was at this point that I stopped.

Escape from the City: A Future Survival Tale by Mic Roland

The book starts off with a note by the author, saying that sci-fi is not his usual genre. Okay…

Anyway, there is a clumsy infodump in the second paragraph which made me stop reading:

The Matri (the ruling class of women who ran the City) provided his education, his job, housing, food, clothing, healthcare: everything, actually.

Sherlock Holmes, Stone, Rot, and Ruin by John Pirillo

In the description:

A series of brutal murders engages Scotland Yard and Sherlock Holmes in pursuit of a killer who leaves a trail of broken and torn bodies as they assault one victim after another, bringing a new reign of terror and horror to London.

Scotland Yard and Sherlock Holmes assault one victim after another?

The book itself starts with a small epigraph that is attributed to “Arthur Conan Doyle’s Journal”, which I very much doubt because it contained sentences like this:

Which side we choose to put to our lips can be a sudden impulsive one or a choice made with clarity and purpose.

A side can be a sudden impulsive one? What?

The Carter Project by Kevin Herrmann

There was a lot of awkward phrases in the first chapter, e.g:

He awkwardly sank into his chair as his heart thumped with embarrassment.

The glow in his eyes disappeared.

I don’t think it was a literal glow, but then again maybe it was. A lot of the sentences were vague like this.

The Life Inside My Mind: The Dark Figure’s Request by David McKee

I stopped at the first paragraph, which read:

I was running, with a torch in hand, following down a narrow path. The flame atop the torch was hot and bright. My heart was beating fast, and I felt curiosity rise. The trees all around me were smouldering and the smoke burned by eyes.

I just thought that some of the sentences could have been better constructed.

Page 102

RADICAL by Dan Ransom

It starts off with the narrator telling us his biography, i.e his physical build, where he was born, etc. And there are few paragraphs of this.

Page 203

Cerberus by John Filcher

It’s written well, there are no mistakes, but I had trouble relating with the main character.

Page 18

A Man With A Gun by Brandon Luffman

There was a grammatical mistake in the first paragraph.

The Wailing Asteroid by Murray Leinster

It starts of very dry, like a prologue, where some people pick up an alien transmission. It lost me by the fifth paragraph or so.

The Portals by Harvey Stanbrough

It’s well written but I couldn’t get into it. Maybe it’s because the character in the first chapter doesn’t have any clear motivations that I can relate to.

Well, I couldn’t find a book I wanted to buy…

I guess I’ll just read the next book in the Subjugation series, Insurrection, since it’s free and I really want to know what happens next.